How do these lyrics sound?

~this is to the put you on the game beat by the game~

put me in the limelight, sportscenter highlights

taste the rainbow, orange chronic and pink sprite

at the party, pass the bottle of bacardi

first im refillin my cup then i hand it off to shawty

the one in the blue shirt she can barely stand up

hear my song come on the speakers she puttin her hands up

she say she tryna get xaned up, askin me for pills

i aint here to make deals im just hear to get killed

hope im leavin all retarded like my name was b millz

weed doctor like phil, drinkin tank like a panzer

dont need to get a dui so im lockin up the lancer

iim gettin dizzy like cancer, infected my body

some bol gettin in my face he got a haircut like gotti

i aint tryna get a homi so i let go of the shotty

on my waist before i turn his face into cooked salami

then i roll out into the room where the blunts blazin

red eyes, got my brain fried somethin cajun

this aint no reggie bush dog it kinda taste jamaican

amazin, feel like betty crocker when im baking

headin to the kegs cause my red cup empty

damn the miller out but the natty got plenty

already drank 20 but im gunnin for more

never been a lightweight never passed out on the floor

its only around 4, but people start leavin

gotta find a ***** with a body who like freaking

so i spy some peurto rican, in a real short skirt

she been playin with her hair i can tell that she a flirt

so i go up start talkin, spittin some game

she said she already knew me she attracted to fame

we went up stairs, conductor i was runnin the train

she be on the honor roll A+ with the brainsHow do these lyrics sound?
6/10 It's pretty good but use more complex rhyming and varieties of metaphors.How do these lyrics sound?
it was pretty good

8/10



u got skills, but maybe try writing about something serious
decent
its decent

not the worst not the best

tell where ur from in the ****

or just do ur thing
It's kool u low key killed the beginning